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Fic: Partita No.1, G

Title:  Partita No. 1
Character: Jim Moriarty
Genre: Gen
Author:
eriksselest
Fandom: BBC Sherlock
Word count: 249
Rating: G
Prompt: Meme #11 for
a_muse_meme “The sky was filled with lights” (Author’s Choice)
Disclaimer: I don’t own Sherlock or any of its characters.

Notes: “Paritia number one! Thank you, Johann Sebastian Bach!” And here is Partita #1 – which I was listening to on repeat while writing this. Comments and criticism are welcome and wanted – this ficlet may be short and a bit existential, but I want to know what you think about it. =)


                Tell me – do you know of the stars at the very edges of our universe? Those born at the pinnacle of everything - leaving the rest of creation to follow downward from the fountain of their nexus? Have you ever thought about those stars, so very few and far between? How lonely their existence must be in growing ever further apart with each passing unit of time. The darkness that pervades their existence is all encompassing, but yet they shine on burning their soul out until they are completely composed of bits of iron. They are desperate for some sort of a companion or mate, but that is utterly impossible.  They give their lives for the hope that they could find something else like them and then they collapse upon themselves, broken and transformed all at once.

                That is the nature of everything, my dear. Of course, my recollection and dictation of this very fact is completely paled in comparison by the truth of it all. That may never be put down – it may only be felt through a silent conversation by those involved. So, I leave you, my dear, in hopes that we may elevate ourselves to be greater than these – to put an end to the loneliness inherent in us all. Stardust, elements, mere atoms . . . in the end it all so plain and unfinished. Where and when may we find that next universe? Will you tell me? What happens when those stars are gone?


Cheers!
~Sel^.+


Comments

( 2 comments — Leave a comment )
(Anonymous)
Aug. 18th, 2012 02:23 am (UTC)
Yr fan fic
it's well written and poetic, but it's not a story so much as a passage in a story. For this to work as an analogy for Sherlock's longing, maybe his desire for a relationship, with Watson or someone else (remember its Ms. Adler who is Sherlock's equal according to AC Doyle) and how he sees himself in relationship to others we need a set up for this passage which gives us the reason for Sherlock to wax on as you have him do. BTW, in the first episode Sherlock admits his basic lack of knowledge of the Universe, stars etc. But what lovely language skills you have, my dear ;)
eriksselest
Aug. 18th, 2012 02:55 am (UTC)
Re: Yr fan fic
Thank you very much for the feedback - it is appreciated!

This was actually Moriarty talking to Sherlock, so I would hope that the dynamic between the both of them would be more aligned with Moriarty. =)
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